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I just fixed a type, soapy. You know me...little anal annie.
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QUOTE(SoapyBeaver @ Dec 8 2006, 08:30 AM) 
NO FLAMES OR I WILL LOCK THIS BITCH AND NOBODY GETS TO PLAY.
Constructive criticism only.
Amen, brother Soapy.
Not only are those the rules for this thread, they are the rules for the entirety of the Academia forum.
You have been warned.
QUOTE(SoapyBeaver @ Dec 8 2006, 08:30 AM)
EDIT: This is intended for academic work only. If you are looking for a review of songs, poetry and other modes of self expression, there are other forums for that.
Art & Lit is the "other forum" - unless it's poetry/creative writing for a class. Then this forum is just fine (but put it in a new thread, please).
The Bully
“Give me your money, bitch.” Says the bully, pushing me into my locker. Already knowing who it is, I turn around and quickly look down at my feet, defenseless.
Great. I just failed yet another Algebra test, and I have to deal with this lesser being of evolution who has to make my life miserable in order to make his better. That’s high school for you.
During grammar school, I never got picked on. I was, however, the quiet kid. But because I was starting high school, I basically had a fresh start. I could re-create my personality. I decided to be the friendly kid on the first day of high school.
“Hey, how’s it going? My name’s Kevin.”
“Shut up, fag.”
Boy, what a mistake. Who would have known saying a simple “hello” would have resulted in damaging torment. From the first day of high school, I was the victim of a bully. From that day on, I decided never to speak unless spoken to. I became withdrawn from other people, and to this day, I still find it hard getting to know others because of what this bully did to me.
But who was this insensitive, cocky, ignorant person? What caused his anger and why did he choose to pin it on me? Why did he decide he could take away my rights for his own entertainment? In my four years of high school, I’ve only learned that his name is Nolan. He never physically, hurt me beyond repair, but the verbal bullying was exceedingly worse than anything that could have done to me physically. He sure made me feel worthless in life. Ever hear of the saying, “Sticks and stones may break my bones but names will never hurt me?” It’s all trash. Verbal abuse can scar you badly. And those scars stay with you for life.
Every morning, I woke up and dreaded going to school. Every morning, I woke up knowing that once again, I would be tormented some time during the day. Every morning, I woke up knowing that nobody either couldn’t or wouldn’t help me. Every morning, I woke up wondering how I could allow a single person to make my life so miserable, and felt more disgusted with myself, and more depressed each day.
You hear of kids committing suicide because they can’t handle the shit bullies give them every day. I was almost one of them. My teachers knew what was going on, but they didn’t do anything about it. To this day, the reason why is beyond me. I couldn’t talk to my parents either, out of fear of shame. Friends of mine saw what was going on, but didn’t know how badly it affected me. I didn’t talk to anyone about it. For basically all of freshman year, I was on the verge of committing suicide, and if I had gone through with it, no one would have known why. I even planned how and where to do it. The unguarded tower right by my school. As easy to climb as it is to jump off.
For all of freshman year, I debated on whether or not I should jump. I was in a bad situation and it was a permanent solution. Every day I walked home and passed the tower. I had an urge to climb it several times, but chose not to at the last minute.
Why didn’t I do it? Not because I thought it would be selfish or cowardly, which I don’t believe in, by the way. I’ve heard a lot of talk about how people shouldn’t kill themselves because it would hurt others close to you. I wasn’t going to go through life feeling like shit just to keep someone else happy. It’s not my duty to keep anyone entertained whilst I go through hell. Suicide is an option. An easy way to deal with all of your problems. An act considered cowardly by many, but who are they to judge what someone does? No one can possibly understand what’s going on in another person’s life. It’s your life, do what you want with it.
As you can probably tell, I’m a bit pro-suicide. I don’t promote people killing themselves, but if they have a reason to do it, go ahead. I myself had all the reasons to do it thought out, until I finally talked to someone about my situation. One late July night in 2004, I was talking to a longtime online friend. This friend was a person I greatly respected. He always knew what he was talking about, and I looked up to him for that. This friend mentioned that he knew people who killed themselves. Looking for some suicide ideas, I asked him questions. After listening to his stories, he gave me his opinion on suicide, which probably saved my life.
He told me that life as it is today is not life as it is tomorrow. Things are always changing, and the things people are facing now will not be the ones they might face tomorrow. He told me that no matter what life throws at you, things will change for the better. Knowing that he was a knowledgeable person, I decided to trust him and take his advice. I would try dealing with the bully for at least another year, and see if anything would come of it.
Every day of freshman year, this kid, Nolan, made my life miserable. I could barely deal with it, and I was at a low point in life. But after finally talking to someone about it, I felt like a different person. On the first day of sophomore year, I remember walking to my locker, immediately being confronted by him. He asked me if I had his money. I simply shook my head, and walked away.
Throughout sophomore year, I worked my ass off to get respect from people in school. I did homework for people, lent people pens, paper, scantrons, money, gave people gum. I did a lot. And by the end of sophomore year, I had an army of people who I knew would stick up for me. Nolan was aware of this, and he knew he couldn’t harm me anymore. For the remainder of high school, however, when he had the chance, he would strike, but I would make his attempts seem ineffective.
I’ve come to realize that suicide is powerfully influenced by lack of support from others. Committing suicide doesn’t prove that you’re a coward, but that your support failed you. I was going through a very hard time and I had chose not to talk to anyone about it. Resultantly, I became depressed and suicidal. Regardless, I’m sort of happy I didn’t talk to anyone. Overcoming a bully and suicide has made me a much stronger person. Nolan may have scarred me for life, but that only makes me a warrior, and a victorious one at that.
Edit: This is an insider's narrative for my English class. I was supposed to write about something private that would normally be closed to others. Something that people would need to understand before they try to judge, study, pity, dismiss or reform me.
“Give me your money, bitch.” Says the bully, pushing me into my locker. Already knowing who it is, I turn around and quickly look down at my feet, defenseless.
Great. I just failed yet another Algebra test, and I have to deal with this lesser being of evolution who has to make my life miserable in order to make his better. That’s high school for you.
During grammar school, I never got picked on. I was, however, the quiet kid. But because I was starting high school, I basically had a fresh start. I could re-create my personality. I decided to be the friendly kid on the first day of high school.
“Hey, how’s it going? My name’s Kevin.”
“Shut up, fag.”
Boy, what a mistake. Who would have known saying a simple “hello” would have resulted in damaging torment. From the first day of high school, I was the victim of a bully. From that day on, I decided never to speak unless spoken to. I became withdrawn from other people, and to this day, I still find it hard getting to know others because of what this bully did to me.
But who was this insensitive, cocky, ignorant person? What caused his anger and why did he choose to pin it on me? Why did he decide he could take away my rights for his own entertainment? In my four years of high school, I’ve only learned that his name is Nolan. He never physically, hurt me beyond repair, but the verbal bullying was exceedingly worse than anything that could have done to me physically. He sure made me feel worthless in life. Ever hear of the saying, “Sticks and stones may break my bones but names will never hurt me?” It’s all trash. Verbal abuse can scar you badly. And those scars stay with you for life.
Every morning, I woke up and dreaded going to school. Every morning, I woke up knowing that once again, I would be tormented some time during the day. Every morning, I woke up knowing that nobody either couldn’t or wouldn’t help me. Every morning, I woke up wondering how I could allow a single person to make my life so miserable, and felt more disgusted with myself, and more depressed each day.
You hear of kids committing suicide because they can’t handle the shit bullies give them every day. I was almost one of them. My teachers knew what was going on, but they didn’t do anything about it. To this day, the reason why is beyond me. I couldn’t talk to my parents either, out of fear of shame. Friends of mine saw what was going on, but didn’t know how badly it affected me. I didn’t talk to anyone about it. For basically all of freshman year, I was on the verge of committing suicide, and if I had gone through with it, no one would have known why. I even planned how and where to do it. The unguarded tower right by my school. As easy to climb as it is to jump off.
For all of freshman year, I debated on whether or not I should jump. I was in a bad situation and it was a permanent solution. Every day I walked home and passed the tower. I had an urge to climb it several times, but chose not to at the last minute.
Why didn’t I do it? Not because I thought it would be selfish or cowardly, which I don’t believe in, by the way. I’ve heard a lot of talk about how people shouldn’t kill themselves because it would hurt others close to you. I wasn’t going to go through life feeling like shit just to keep someone else happy. It’s not my duty to keep anyone entertained whilst I go through hell. Suicide is an option. An easy way to deal with all of your problems. An act considered cowardly by many, but who are they to judge what someone does? No one can possibly understand what’s going on in another person’s life. It’s your life, do what you want with it.
As you can probably tell, I’m a bit pro-suicide. I don’t promote people killing themselves, but if they have a reason to do it, go ahead. I myself had all the reasons to do it thought out, until I finally talked to someone about my situation. One late July night in 2004, I was talking to a longtime online friend. This friend was a person I greatly respected. He always knew what he was talking about, and I looked up to him for that. This friend mentioned that he knew people who killed themselves. Looking for some suicide ideas, I asked him questions. After listening to his stories, he gave me his opinion on suicide, which probably saved my life.
He told me that life as it is today is not life as it is tomorrow. Things are always changing, and the things people are facing now will not be the ones they might face tomorrow. He told me that no matter what life throws at you, things will change for the better. Knowing that he was a knowledgeable person, I decided to trust him and take his advice. I would try dealing with the bully for at least another year, and see if anything would come of it.
Every day of freshman year, this kid, Nolan, made my life miserable. I could barely deal with it, and I was at a low point in life. But after finally talking to someone about it, I felt like a different person. On the first day of sophomore year, I remember walking to my locker, immediately being confronted by him. He asked me if I had his money. I simply shook my head, and walked away.
Throughout sophomore year, I worked my ass off to get respect from people in school. I did homework for people, lent people pens, paper, scantrons, money, gave people gum. I did a lot. And by the end of sophomore year, I had an army of people who I knew would stick up for me. Nolan was aware of this, and he knew he couldn’t harm me anymore. For the remainder of high school, however, when he had the chance, he would strike, but I would make his attempts seem ineffective.
I’ve come to realize that suicide is powerfully influenced by lack of support from others. Committing suicide doesn’t prove that you’re a coward, but that your support failed you. I was going through a very hard time and I had chose not to talk to anyone about it. Resultantly, I became depressed and suicidal. Regardless, I’m sort of happy I didn’t talk to anyone. Overcoming a bully and suicide has made me a much stronger person. Nolan may have scarred me for life, but that only makes me a warrior, and a victorious one at that.
Edit: This is an insider's narrative for my English class. I was supposed to write about something private that would normally be closed to others. Something that people would need to understand before they try to judge, study, pity, dismiss or reform me.
Please give us a little background. Is this a story for a creative writing class? What's the goal of the paper?
I wrote this for my freshman english class (Which I'm currently taking.). Requirements: Research paper with minimum of four sources of 3 different kinds. Any topic.
Due Dec. 18
Most of my sources are on the internet due to the lack of relevant information in a community college library.
I'm mainly concerned about any information I have that is patently incorrect or any relevant information I should include, as well as any other constructive criticism.
(It's about 10 single-space pages.)
the full Word document
(I tried linking it. Didn't work for some reason.)
I fixed it.
Due Dec. 18
Most of my sources are on the internet due to the lack of relevant information in a community college library.
I'm mainly concerned about any information I have that is patently incorrect or any relevant information I should include, as well as any other constructive criticism.
(It's about 10 single-space pages.)
the full Word document
(I tried linking it. Didn't work for some reason.)
I fixed it.
hey bart, you know anywhere people can upload their .doc and .ppt and then can just link them in their post?
I can't wait till I post my thesis in here. i've only got the introduction and half the abstract done and it's over 8 pages, we need a way to keep this thread tidy.
I just don't know of a site that will host files of that type.
And guys I will read your stuff, but right now I've got 2 papers and 3 exams to accomplish this weekend.
It might be beneficial to head your post something a la this....
Purpose: <Class it's for, type of assignment, etc>
Due date: <or date you need review commentary by>
Criteria: <What you know about what the instructor expects from the project>
Thanks for the help on this bart, you're a damn fine editor.
I can't wait till I post my thesis in here. i've only got the introduction and half the abstract done and it's over 8 pages, we need a way to keep this thread tidy.
I just don't know of a site that will host files of that type.
And guys I will read your stuff, but right now I've got 2 papers and 3 exams to accomplish this weekend.
It might be beneficial to head your post something a la this....
Purpose: <Class it's for, type of assignment, etc>
Due date: <or date you need review commentary by>
Criteria: <What you know about what the instructor expects from the project>
Thanks for the help on this bart, you're a damn fine editor.
QUOTE(SoapyBeaver @ Dec 9 2006, 12:40 PM)
hey bart, you know anywhere people can upload their .doc and .ppt and then can just link them in their post?
I can't wait till I post my thesis in here. i've only got the introduction and half the abstract done and it's over 8 pages, we need a way to keep this thread tidy.
I just don't know of a site that will host files of that type.
I will allow members to host files on my site, but please refrain from using this space for anything else. If anyone steps over the line, I'm going to:
1. Delete your crap (of course)
2. Ban your ass.
3. Be that much less likely to use my own resources for TJNR-related stuff in the future.
Here's how it will work:
1. open this URL in your browser: http://barthost.net/tjnr/academia/file_uploader.php
2. follow the directions you will see on the screen.
3. Wait for the confirmation message. Depending on the size of the file and speed of your connection, you may have to wait for a little while. When the upload completes, a message will appear telling you if there was a problem or where to access the uploaded file (http://barthost.net/tjnr/academia/[case-sensitive name of the file you uploaded]).
There's a max file size cap on my uploads, too. I think it's set to about 8MB, but it could be lower.
If you want a file taken down from the upload site, send me a PM with the name of the file to remove.
QUOTE(SoapyBeaver @ Dec 9 2006, 12:40 PM)
Thanks for the help on this bart, you're a damn fine editor.
My time is currently even more limited than yours, but I'll pitch in and help when I get a chance.
Also...
If you have spaces in the name of your uploaded document, you will need to replace each of them with "%20" to link from this forum. The document will open from my server without this change, but not from a link on TJNR.
QUOTE(DesperateDan @ Dec 8 2006, 05:24 PM)
I'm mainly concerned about any information I have that is patently incorrect or any relevant information I should include, as well as any other constructive criticism.
Did it happen? Did anyone offer suggestions or corrections? I assume it's too late now and the paper has already been turned it and received whatever grade it received. I wish I had been able to lend my time, but it has been a busy time in my life and there hasn't recently been time enough to devote to proofing somebody else's stuff.
In the future, folks, I would suggest that you champion your papers a little more forcefully. Let the other members know exactly what your hoping to get from them (as Dan did), but also...don't be afraid to reference specific passages in your paper that may be questionable or in need of...a second or third opinion to shape it into perfect prose.
And don't be afraid to bump the thread to keep it in the other members' minds (though don't just post "bump." I hate that.)
QUOTE(badbart @ Jan 12 2007, 02:50 AM)
Did it happen? Did anyone offer suggestions or corrections? I assume it's too late now and the paper has already been turned it and received whatever grade it received. I wish I had been able to lend my time, but it has been a busy time in my life and there hasn't recently been time enough to devote to proofing somebody else's stuff.
I didn't get any feedback, but it wasn't a problem (got a 98). I would still appreciate any thoughts anyone would have. I worked pretty hard and it meant quite a bit to me. It pretty well represents my personal beliefs, so I'd like to make sure I have everything correct.
Damn, I could have been some help on it if I had seen it sooner, but most of the stuff was good for the non-engineers/physics types.
QUOTE(Victor_Vega @ Jan 12 2007, 12:26 AM)
Damn, I could have been some help on it if I had seen it sooner, but most of the stuff was good for the non-engineers/physics types.
Proving my point...
QUOTE(badbart @ Jan 11 2007, 11:50 PM)
And don't be afraid to bump the thread to keep it in the other members' minds (though don't just post "bump." I hate that.)
When posts move beyond the "New Posts" listing, they tend to be forgotten...
I'll post one I wrote in an hour about the impeachment process and the courts role. it's actually written in the form of a judicial opinion.
Ok, so heres the deal. Im about to finish my MA thesis (due in 24 days) and Id like to hear some (any) opinions on it. So far, I got all of the theory typed up, which is four chapters (about 33 pages) and its only missing the practical part. Anyone feels like having a read? The title is something along the lines of "The Nature of Translating Philosophical Writings" and its aim is to stress the interconnectedness of the form and the meaning of philosophy, especially in respect to translation. It argues in favour of maintaining the original ambiguous form in the translation because it has its purpose and not making the translation reader-friendly. Read it and find out more.....Ill post it to anyone whos interested.
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